lightpaw

[Crowzerplorodon]

Well, it seems you got a lot of help. That's good. I would like a little more on her personality, though.

And the name Silverpool is bad. While she is not played, I would like to see it changed, because -pool is not traditional. Despite Graypool. >.>

Uh, make her at least one moon older please? That way her survival rate before she met the loner would be a little higher.

[funmaster]

changed mothers name to silverfur.
made age quite a bit older.
but i cant really think of much to improve the personality :/

[Poizuun]

Her beliefs need to be extended on a bit. Yeah, she believes strongly in StarClan, but how much is strongly, exactly? Does she consult with them or stare up at the skies a lot? Is she curious about them? Or fear them? Do they give her hope for the afterlife?

Really all her personality needs is extending. She's not really trusting and is pretty shy, but does that mean she doesn't want to make friends? Does she keep more to herself when doing her apprentice duties or does she try to get close with the other apprentices?

[funmaster]

done that.

[funmaster]

should i try to get this accepted, or give up hope for this one and make another one?

[Rolo]

Keep trying Funmaster ^^ Honestly! There is no point letting all that work go to waste.

It looks like this could be done very soon, don't lose faith!