Ashfang

[snowstorm]

Name | Ashfang

Gender | She-cat

Age | 12 moons

Rank | Warrior

Clan | Pine

Beliefs| Believes in StarClan and the Warrior code, clan loyalty to own clan. Always putting the clan first, and no divided loyalties.

Parents | Spottedfang and Shrewfur

Siblings | died after birth, only child

Other Kin | none

Mate | none yet

Crush | none yet

Kits | none yet

Apprentice/Mentor | none yet

Appearance | Grey, with green eyes and one white paw.

Personality | Fierce and loyal but kind around clan mates

Skills | Good at Hunting and is agood fighter. Is a fast runner and can fish, but not that good.

History | Formerly a rouge, Ashfang is dedicated to her clan. With first hardships in loyalty. Her first goal is to prove her loyalty, and that she is a true PineClan warrior. Her second is to be the best warrior she can until the day she joins StarClan. Ashfang tries to be a good warrior despite of what the other cats say. Ashfang always does her best to be loyal and will always do so. She has promised to always be loyal, trustworthy and good to her clan. She upholds the warrior code and honors her warrior ancestors. She will fight to her death for her clan, and fight fiercely until that day.

[Poizuun]

In order for Ashfang to be in PineClan, she can't have a belief in StarClan, since PineClan are the resident non-believers.

Everything else is pretty lacking. Her description needs a lot more than just colors and we have minimum numbers of sentences for each section, which you need to follow. Her personality is one sentence when we need at least, like, five or ten. Also, she seems like one of the "nice but mean" characters based on your description. We can't see anything of her quirks or really anything of her personality in just that sentence. She doesn't seem to have any flaws, seeing as PineClan doesn't need to worry about fishing as much as StreamClan would.

Her history has a bit of work also. Yeah, she was a rogue, but you don't go into detail about her past and how she came to PineClan.

[Crowzerplorodon]

And on top of it all, there is already an Ashfang in FoF. Sorry, but we cannot have two cats with the same name.