Pebblepaw(complete)

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Name | Pebblepaw

Gender | she-cat

Age | 10 moons

Rank | apprentice

Clan | Stream

Beliefs | We learn from the past, but the future belongs to the living!

Parents | Sharpwhisker(father) and Lilyfoot(mother)

Siblings | Sootpaw

Other Kin | N/A

Mate | "not yet"

Crush | "not yet"

Kits | "not yet"

Apprentice/Mentor | "not yet"

Appearance | She is a slightly fluffy light grey cat with black front paws and left ear being black. Her eyes are dark blue and around her eyes the fur is a darker grey that matches the dark grey that speckles across her shaggy tail and up her spine. Her back paws are also speckled with the same dark grey color.

Personality | Pebblepaw is a rather harsh cat always taking play a step too far many times, seeing as she scarred her brother due to this. She can come off as mean and rude to those around her, but overall she is protective of her clan and clan mates. She is a smart cat but usually thinks after action in the heat of things, but if she were to learn to take her time she could be a great strategist. Unlike her brother her faith in Starclan is in passing, she believes it when needed, but otherwise she thinks that everything is up to the living and not the dead.

Skills | Pretty good strategist, but still acts before thinking. Fishing is her weakest style of hunting, but birds and small mammals are no match for her.

History | Born to a good queen, Lilyfoot who was mate to Sharpwhisker. Lilyfoot was a pretty white she-cat with blue eyes and Sharpwhisker was a black cat with grey splotches. Sadly Sharpwhisker never saw the birth of his kits due to dying from an infected wound and Lilyfoot lived long enough to watch her kits become apprentices before succumbing to her unknown illness. Pebblepaw grew up along with her brother, Sootpaw up through kit-hood and into becoming apprentices. During kit-hood Pebblepaw, while playing a bit too rough, scarred her brother’s ear, but despite that he never seemed to hate her. She loves her brother but still treats him a bit rough seeing as she’s just a brute. She hopes to one day become a great warrior, but until then she has to settle being just a ‘paw.

[Rolo]

This is a good first bio On the whole, your character is well formed and has a very definite character Well done! With a little elaboration, this cat could be very good.

Here on FoF, we try to help you improve at your writing and bio making skills by giving you some constructive criticism on each bio. It's not done to be mean, it's done to help you Virtually every person has to make some changes to their first cat, so it's a path we all go down. However, trust me, it will get easier as you work out what we require :3

Beliefs
A nice little motto, but you need to explain her life views a little more. What has given her this inspiring determination? Especially since her parents died. Also, you need to mention Starclan belief. You brushed on it in personality, but why does he only believe in them in passing? How does this effect how he acts?

Relationships
Here on FoF, you have to indicate whether a cat's parents and siblings are alive and whether they are played. The possible tags you could use are

[NP] - Not played
[PC] - A character you or another member are considering making
[DC- *member name] Definite character, already made by someone else.

So, for Sharpwhisker you would need to put - Sharpwhisker(father) deceased [NP]

You need to do this for all the characters.

Appearance
Someone with specialism in appearance checking will look this over.

Personality
I got a nice impression of this cat She sounds like she's got an intriguing character. To make this better, you should tell us why she acts like this. Why is she so harsh? Why does she feel so protective over her clan mates? Tell us this and she'll feel more like a person. If we know what drives her in life, we can see into her very soul.

Skills
You need to mention her fighting and swimming abilities.

So, on the whole, a great bio! I believe that you're almost there, and if you make these changes your cat will be better for it and accepted easily

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