Springsong(from Russia)

[springsong]

Name | Springsong

Gender | she-cat

Age | 12 moons

Rank | warrior

Clan | FogClan

Beliefs| Springsong believes in StarClan, but does not consider their ideal. In its opinion, all cats are capable to make mistakes, and the death cannot change it. She almost does not trust in prophecies and signs, does not aspire to learn the future because knows - always in the future there will be what she does not wish to know and will not manage to change. It also became the reason of that the cat has refused to become the healer, despite all arrangements.


Appearance | Springsong - a low fragile graceful cat. At first sight will seem what to win her simply, but fury to which she battles, helps her to leave the most difficult situations. Her wool long, dense, smooth, silky, pesochno-golden colour - monophonic, only on a head between ears, in front, is some small stains. Eyes travjanisto-green, explaining a name. Such colours can be met only in the late spring. A voice sonorous and melodious, firm, sometimes very sharp. On tail Springsong almost imperceptible more dark strips, than a wool. Same and on paws.

Personality | All who will have a talk more than five minutes with Springsong, will confidently tell, that she really is able to listen. Time most part in conversation the cat is silent, while her something will not ask. But Springsong it is quick-tempered, in fury it is aggressive enough. Her mood to foresee is practically impossible, as it is impossible to understand, that at this strange cat in a head. However, despite the character, warrior it is very devoted to a tribe. In her opinion, treachery is punished by death. She perfectly consults alone, but always appreciates the help of a tribe - anyway when for her it is not humiliating.

Skills |Springsong it is not so good, but nevertheless is able to float. She quickly runs - the small weight and small, but strong paws helps. The game can track down both in bushes, and on open places. On trees climbs not too well. In fight of shows perfectly.

History | Forgive me, please, but I cannot write the biography. First, me soon to leave the computer, and secondly, to translate all it from Russian into English manually very hard. Probably, in the future when I will better learn your language, I will correct it. I will tell some words: the cat was born in a tribe. At childbirth mother has died, in fight with other tribe in three days the father was lost also. The cat was brought up by one queen which, unfortunately, mother to replace has not managed.

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written by roscoe. |3;



“Springsong - a low fragile graceful cat. At first sight will seem what to win her simply, but fury to which she battles, helps her to leave the most difficult situations. Her wool long, dense, smooth, silky, pesochno-golden colour - monophonic, only on a head between ears, in front, is some small stains. Eyes travjanisto-green, explaining a name. Such colours can be met only in the late spring. A voice sonorous and melodious, firm, sometimes very sharp. On tail Springsong almost imperceptible more dark strips, than a wool. Same and on paws.”

Alright, I’ll start with saying we understand that your English is not the best. But in your translating you seem to use a lot of “purple prose” which basically means “fancy speak”. All I could really get from her description is that she is a small, golden cat with green eyes. Perhaps clear it up a bit because right now the understanding I have of her is too vague to make a decent picture. My suggestion is you divide it into sections. Spend a few sentences describing her size, a few describing her fur, and then a few describing the other things (whiskers, eyes, etc.)

Now to point something out. Forest of Fate is a “traditional” site. Springsong does not work because:

- A cat cannot look like spring. Cats are not named for their eyes because eyes are not the first thing one would notice. Also, when cats are born, their eyes are closed. When they open they are blue-ish for a few weeks.

- A cat cannot use a song or look like a song or act like a song. The only “song” they know of is birdsong, which cannot represent anything to a cat.

- A good suggestion for a name would be something along the lines of “Golden” or “Sand”. Not Spring.



“All who will have a talk more than five minutes with Springsong, will confidently tell, that she really is able to listen. Time most part in conversation the cat is silent, while her something will not ask. But Springsong it is quick-tempered, in fury it is aggressive enough. Her mood to foresee is practically impossible, as it is impossible to understand, that at this strange cat in a head. However, despite the character, warrior it is very devoted to a tribe. In her opinion, treachery is punished by death. She perfectly consults alone, but always appreciates the help of a tribe - anyway when for her it is not humiliating.”

Again, this is full of “purple prose”. It is also very confusing due to the wording. I can pull three things out: That she is a good listener, she is quick-tempered, and she is loyal. These are some good traits; you can definitely branch off on these to develop her to her full potential. Expand on those and clear up the wording used in the personality, I can see her becoming a nice addition to FogClan.



“Forgive me, please, but I cannot write the biography. First, me soon to leave the computer, and secondly, to translate all it from Russian into English manually very hard. Probably, in the future when I will better learn your language, I will correct it. I will tell some words: the cat was born in a tribe. At childbirth mother has died, in fight with other tribe in three days the father was lost also. The cat was brought up by one queen which, unfortunately, mother to replace has not managed.”

It is completely understandable that you are having slight difficulties completing the biography. However, the cat cannot be accepted until she is completely and meets the specifications required by this site.

The plot here revolves around cats from “ForestClan” leaving and going on a long journey until they find a new home. They have been located in their new homes for about six moons now. Because of her age, it would be more likely that Springsong was a rogue before joining FogClan.

If you would like help on developing this character and having her match the site please PM “Roscoe”. I have no problem with helping you out. You already have the basis for a wonderful character and with a little work she can easily get accepted. Your English will get better over time; the people here would love to help you out. Don’t be afraid to ask.