Wolfpaw

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(I have no idea what to do here, so I just started out by joining FogClan. Please tell me if I did anything wrong.)

Name | Wolfpaw

Gender | Tom

Age | 10 moons

Rank | Apprentice

Clan | FogClan

Beliefs| In StarClan, the warrior code, his heart.

Parents | Sire: Swordclaw [NP]. Dam: Amberwing [NP]

Siblings | Mountainkit, Vixenkit, Blazekit. [all NP]

Other Kin | Grandparents: Goldenears, Onefur [both NP]

Mate | None as of now

Crush | None as of now

Kits | None as of now

Apprentice/Mentor | None as of now

Appearance | Wolfpaw is a silvery-grey tabby tom with icy, piercing blue orbs. His fur is fairly short, with a few dark, small, black spots that dot his fur. He has a thin tail, and is used to slipping under the brambles. His fur color reminds most of a wolf, which is why he got his name; Wolfpaw.

Personality | Wolfpaw is nice, caring, and courageous. He likes going in battles, but knows that they are serious, and cats could die in them. He has a very strong belief in StarClan, and he sometimes wishes that he could be a medicine cat, but continues to hunt for the old and fight for his Clan and life.

Skills | Fighting. His claws are razor-sharp, but doesn't mean that he can't loss a battle. His wisdom is quick too, which makes him a fairly good apprentice.

History | Born in FogClan, along with his one sister, Vixenkit, and his two brothers, Mountainkit and Blazekit. His siblings soon died, much as he grieved, he knew that he had to move along. Vixenkit and Blazekot were taken by a fox, and when his last brother and Wolfpaw became apprentices, Mountainkit somehow disappeared in their territory and never came back. His ambitious father, Swordclaw, a quick, adder-like tom with icy white fur and silver eyes, died soon after, and his family told him not to dwell in the past to long and forget about the living. He soon forgot about his dead father and siblings and tried best for his Clan.

[Crowzerplorodon]

Let’s start with his name.

If a wolf pack was near enough to the clans that they would be named after one, then the cats would get picked off. We’re not going to name after wolves here. Try things like Gray- or Pebble- or Dove- instead.

The following names will also have to be changed:
Swordclaw: cats do not know of swords.
Amberwing: cats do not have wings nor do they act ‘wingy’.
Mountainkit: just try ‘boulder’.
Vixenkit: ‘Fox’.
Blazekit: ‘Fire’.

I would highly suggest reading both the plot and the ‘how to make a good app’ guide. The history does not match with the plot, nor does it show how it affects his personality. His personality is also extremely gary-stu which needs to be fixed. Beliefs, appearance, history, and personality all need to be expanded on.