Mapleflower

[panda]

Name | Mapleflower

Gender | She-cat

Age | 23 moons

Rank | Warrior

Clan | MeadowClan

Beliefs| Knows StarClan is there but has never really asked any of them or spoken much of them.

Parents | Heavyclaw(Father)NP and Barktail(Mother)NP

Siblings | Earthstone(Brother)NP

Other Kin | None

Mate | Not yet

Crush | Not yet

Kits | Not yet

Apprentice/Mentor | Not yet

Appearance | Mapleflower is a medium-sized longhaired ginger cat with pale green eyes and small highlights of white fur on her tail and chest. Her ginger fur is striped with dark orange rings that wrap around her paws and down to her tail. She also has quite large ears which give her an advantage when hunting. She has thick, strong legs like her father and a short bushy tail.

Personality | She is kind and loves the sit and watch the days go by. Mapleflower is kit at heart and enjoys swatting at butterflies.

She doesn’t have much of a connection with StarClan. Mapleflower isn’t much of a fighter either but would die defending her clan if she had too. She tries to follow the warrior code as best she can but is more likely to follow her heart instead.

Skills | Mapleflower’s best skill is hunting. Her big ears help hear the small creatures that burrow and hide under the forest floor. And her strong legs help her leap and catch even the biggest birds.

History | Mapleflower’s mother(Barktail) and father(Heavyclaw) met in the forest and instantly fell in love.
Seven moons after Barktail gave birth she went out into the woods and was attacked by a dog and killed. After that Heavyclaw abandoned Mapleflower and her brother and became a loner. Mapleflower and Earthstone have hated their father ever since.
Earthstone eventually left Mapleflower as well to go in search for their father.
She hasn’t heard from either of them since.

[Poizuun]

Overall it's okay, but she needs a lot more added to her personality.
Is she more gentle, instead of being a fighter or is she just passive-aggressive? What is her relationship with her Clanmates? Mostly I think you just need to extend on the ideas you have down, instead of just using one sentence to describe sections of her personality.

[Crowzerplorodon]

Just like what Poizuun said, her personality needs a lot more to it.

Now, why would her parents have Warrior names? I kinda got the impression that they were rogues. So clear up her history a bit too please.

Now, I'm having a problem with the name Earthstone. -stone may not be sacred to the cats here, but it is far from traditional. Even if he's not going to be used, I would like it if you just changed the suffix quickly.