Kyo
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Post by Kyo on Mar 9, 2009 9:25:14 GMT -5
The biggest flaw I see is her skills.
"tree sap and leaf pouches (to carry nuts and other food in)"
What would cats want with nuts? And most of their food would be the size of a leaf or bigger.
"small sharpened sticks (for battle and fishing)"
And how do you suppose a cat would use this? They have claws for that sort of thing. A cat isnt going to attempt to carry a small stick to stab fish, when using their claws is so much easier.
Next would be her history. It's pretty good, I just have a few questions. You say that a fox got into camp and killed her parents. Where were the other warriors? They wouldnt have just stood by and let something like that happen. :l
Also, could you possibly find a picture for your cat? Thanks. 
Sorry if I seemed a bit harsh. >.<
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May
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Post by May on Mar 9, 2009 15:20:24 GMT -5
M'kay... -pokes beliefs- I could change it to berries or whatever... >> Oh, and the pouches are SEVERAL leaves held together with tree sap. -thinks of ways to make ideas useable- Hmm... Everyone else was out patrolling/hunting? Oh, and although this isn't entirely accurate, I was thinking of using this one -----> farm3.static.flickr.com/2195/1698621998_dd3341f9d7.jpg |
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Kyo
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Post by Kyo on Mar 11, 2009 14:35:41 GMT -5
I could change it to berries or whatever... >> Oh, and the pouches are SEVERAL leaves held together with tree sap. -thinks of ways to make ideas useable-
I'm not sure if the other admins&mod would approve of this. I suppose it could /possibly/ be used to carry some herbs for the medicine cats, like poppy seeds...But it's still iffy for me.
Hmm... Everyone else was out patrolling/hunting?
They wouldn't leave the camp unguarded. They would have left some warriors behind. One fox isn't strong enough to fight off the other warriors at camp, kill two of them, then steal a kit. :l
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Post by Crowzerplorodon on Mar 15, 2009 12:37:16 GMT -5
Ok, for the skills thing, I say take out the sharpened sticks entirely. Cats have claws which are a lot easier to use.
For the pouch it could work for a medicine cat thing. Giving them an easier way to carry herbs and whatnot. If you make that clear, it would work just fine.
And the history is incomplete. You need to end it with them ending up at their new homes.
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May
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Post by May on Apr 20, 2009 11:32:43 GMT -5
Dx Sorry about abandoning Hawkclaw for a while. I procrastinate WAY too much.
And Crow, why does it HAVE to be an herb thing? She eats berries/edible leaves/edible roots/etc., so why can't she use the pouches for that?
-headdesk- Sorry for being really stubborn about this. I just like Hawkclaw the way she is, so I try making up excuses.
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Post by tiddler on May 1, 2009 17:07:08 GMT -5
The problem is, May, is that cats aren't like canines... They actually need to live on meat, or they die. Berries, edible roots, etc.etc. simply don't provide enough for a cat, and they would quickly die of malnutrition. I had a cat very much like Hawkclaw; I suggest instead of eating no meat, perhaps having such deep respect for prey she gives them a short ceremony praying she is forgiven for taking their life?
Well, that is what my cat did xD;;
Another one, is to hunt spairingly.
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