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Post by katara on Jul 27, 2009 0:49:57 GMT -5
I was washing dishes earlier and suddenly thought up a Warriors rp plot that I'd like you guys to rate. 1 is the lowest, 10 is the highest. Legends speak of the brave and powerful Hawkstar, and how he restored peace to the three clans of the forest after they had been betrayed many moons ago. He had been most likely the best known cat in history, the greatest clanner ever to set his paws out in the wild. He was even noble as an elder of Nightclan - until one day, he died. An unknown Mapleclan cat had murdered him. Figuring out who would do such a thing has caused the clans much strife, and created a reputation for the killer; "The Undiscovered." Now, with a killer on the loose and a clan to be blamed, hell is breaking loose and no one may be trusted. Welcome to the Forest of Twisted Miracles, where everyone fights their own battles~ (even the kits loljk)
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Post by Ten on Jul 27, 2009 19:03:20 GMT -5
no rating from me.
"he restored peace" -- How'd he do that?
"after they had been betrayed" -- How so?
"An unknown Mapleclan cat had murdered him." -- because...?
"Figuring out who would do such a thing has caused the clans much strife" -- You mean... what? arguing?
"and created a reputation for the killer" -- That's not a reputation. That's a nickname.
"a clan to be blamed" -- What?
"where everyone fights their own battles" -- Which are what? What's the conflict here? Looking for someone and/or not knowing something isn't a conflict.
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