Lynxclaw [ilu-ihu]

[ZEBRA ! [used to be toasty]]

Lynxclaw;;

Gender |
Tom

Age|
15 moons

Rank |
Warrior

Clan |
Fogclan

Beliefs|
Lynxclaw believes that Starclan is there. His thoughts are so because he feels he needs to believe in them so he can be happy. He thinks that Starclan can do anything. And control a cats day. If one cat doesn't believe in them, Starclan might get angry and somehow make their lives miserable. Also, he believes in them for a good home after wards. But the most important reason Lynxclaw believes in Starclan, is because what if you where there, and some cat didn't believe in you? Wouldn't that make you feel fake, and just.. Horrible to think that someone doesn't want to care about your presence? Lynxclaw gives all his beliefs, love, and respect toward Starclan and its rules.

Parents |
Lily [mother;np] Panda [father;np]

Siblings |
Lilo [sister;np] Stitch [brother;np]

Mate |
"Not yet"

Crush |
"Not yet"

Kits |
"Not yet"

Apprentice/Mentor |
"Not yet"

Appearance |
Lynxclaw is a big cat. He is not all that tall, but his muscle and length of fur makes him look really big. He is husky, and very lithe. He was a big bone structure, making him look even bigger. He is well fed, making him not too skinny, or fat. His chest is very big. He was a fluffy tail, and is kinda small for a normal tail, but not too small. He has a round face. It is very handsome and pretty. His eyes are very big and they are very round. His ears are big, and are round at the tops. His whiskers are very long, sticking out of his face, then slightly drooping down at the ends. He also has a small, bright pink nose. His legs are normal sized, and his paws are huge. He also has huge, sharp, and dangerous claws.

His fur is fluffy. It is on the long side, but not very long at all. In the Winter, he gains so much fur that he is a very fluffy cat, and so he is a long haired cat. But in the Summer, he sheds alot of it off, and it is rather short. It is also very sleek in the Summer. His chest is very soft, and puffy. His fur sticks out in different directions at his chest and stomach area, then clams down at his back, so his fur just goes in one direction. To the left.

His fur is a dark grey, black, white, and grey. On his back, It is a grey with dark grey shapes, that look kinda like circles. His tail is dark grey, with black rings going around it. His chest is a creamy white, which goes down and makes his stomach white too. His legs are grey, with dark grey rings going up them. His face is grey, with black stripes going down his forehead. There are black stripes that run on his cheeks, next to each of his eyes. Under his nose, it gets white. His eyes are a dark yellow, and is green near the pupils. It changes with his expression. If he is angry, his eyes get a darker yellow. If he is happy, the yellow gets slightly brighter. And if he is sad, the yellow gets paler.

Personality |
Lynxclaw has two personality's. First one: Have fun. Second one: Shut up and listen to me!

When he is happy, he will be awfully kind. His family was kind to him when he was younger, and he knows how good that feels. If he likes to be treated that way, then others should to. So he is nice to everybody. Also, when he is in a good mood, he wants to have fun. Weather it is joking around, running around, breaking a rule (and not getting in too much trouble), chatting, or catching prey, he will want to do it. Why not cherish the moment, and just get happier? And finally, when he is in a good mood, he is care free. If he is happy, probably nothing bad is going on. And he doesn't have to worry about anything. So this means he can be care free, because everything is going how it should be.

When Lynxclaw isn't in a good mood, he is not fun to be around. When he was a kit, and always got non-stop bullied, he could never hold back his anger. So anger issues kinda stuck with him, ever since know. It has became a horrible habit, and can no longer get out of it. It is hard to control, he ends up screaming and yelling, fighting and threatening.

When is in the the middle of bad mood, and good mood, he is serious. He wants the clan to be happy, so he wants to try to be as serious as possible for the clan's ways to go smoothly. He will follow orders, give orders, and do whatever he has to do to keep the clan well organized. He is clam, and will try not to mess any thing up.

When happy, he is nice, and reacts to everybody or everything with respect, kindness, and with joy. He will love to talk when he is happy, so he is very talkative. When in a bad mood, he hates everything. He will snap at you, threaten you, and just.. Be angry. He will talk to hi self, mutter things to himself, and is cruel.

When he is in a debate, he will always make sure he wins it. He always agrees with his ways, and never looks back at them or regrets them at all. He will fight them, until the other one just gives up. He is horrible to argue with, because everybody knows he will win it.

Skills |
Lynxclaw is very skilled at fighting. His big claws can swipe at anyone and knock them out. His paws are awfully heavy, and they are his favorite weapon. He is also very strong. His muscles are strong enough, so if you pin someone down, they will not be able to get up. This is also one of his favorite weapons. He is very fast, because he will push off the ground with lots of energy, so it is like he jumps to place to place, other then running to place to place. This gets him places quicker. He is also good at hunting, because his long claws will kill his prey quickly, other then trying to get his prey, and not be able to because he was short claws, and he missed.

Although his running skill is very fast, it does not last for long. His paws are awfully big. He can also be rather stealthy.

Lynxclaw is good at having fun, because he never runs out of ideas that someone, or him, might find fun. He is also funny. Something about him makes others cats amused. Lynxclaw likes to amuse other cats, and it works well.

He is not good at calming little kits down. If they are yowling, and screeching in pain or fear, Lynxclaw gets bothered at once, and will get very annoyed, therefore decreasing his chance of succeeding in his goal of relaxing them.

History |
Kithood
When Lynxclaw was a kit, his name was Vamp. Short for Vampire, because he was born on Halloween, and his owners thought it would be funny if he was named something "scary". When Vamp was a kit, he was very nice, kind, and sweet. He shared his life with his two siblings, Lilo and Stitch, (Because they where also born on Halloween, and the owners kids where being Lilo and Stitch), and his parents, Panda and Lily. The had a great life, until a cat at least five moons moved into the house next to them. He was mean, and he liked to make fun of other cats. His name was Tom. Whenever Vamp would come out and play in his yard, Tom would come and be rude. He would make fun of him every way possible. Stuff like "You look ugly", "You are stupid", and "You have a dumb name." Would be used as insults. He got awfully tired of this, so he always made sure that Tom wasn't there whenever he went out. But Tom always came out, and made fun of him over and over.

Vamp now just didn't want to come outside. But one day, he noticed Stitch was outside, talking to Tom. His owners noticed, and thought that maybe their cats got along with Tom. So when Vamp's owners went on vacation, they dropped Vamp's family over at Tom's house. It was like eating dirt 24/7. It was a nightmare. He had to stay there for two weeks, and was constantly made fun of. It was horrible. Vamp finally could not take it, and he had to run away. So he did. He got outside, and ran to the forest. Hopefully only till his owners came back. He survived off the food Tom's owners left out for strays, and he waited. Waited. And waited for his owners to come back. They never did. Maybe.. They moved.

So one day, he went into the house to see. He jumped over the backyard fence, and trotted over to the door. A horrible smell filled his nose, and he knew that instant, there was a new family. So he went back to the forest, ate the stray cat food, and planned a day of teaching himself how to hunt. He hunted successfully, and he knew that he could live out by himself. So he ran away as far as he could.

Older
So he moved on. He traveled every day, never stopping for more then two nights. About a year past, until he found a forest. It had wonderful, plentiful prey. It had lots of water, and it had great shelter. It was also very foggy, which made it much better to hide from things. He made a little den, and stayed there for about two moons. He also learned how to fight, just by practicing against trees, and against those huge animals that dared fight back. He even practiced every day for a little while, just in case of a real battle.

14 moons
He soon found out that cats lived there, when he was discovered by a Warrior. He came back to the camp and learned about all the clans ways. He loved the idea. So he joined. Gaining his name Lynxclaw for his grey fur, and wonderful fighting skills. About a moon passed, and Lynxclaw loves his new home. He is a wonderful Warrior, and will always make a good clanmate.

[Rolo]

Only a few issues:

Most of Fogclan's prey consists of stuff you would stalk and then run for a second and kill. It's unlikely he'd have not enough energy to hunt properly, so you need another reason. Perhaps he is heavy-pawed and can't be very stealthy?

How did he become so skilled at fighting if he was never taught it? You might wanna mention he was trained in it for a while. If anything, if he was living on his own for ages, likelyhood is he'd be better at hunting, since he'd have to do it all himself. You might want to think about that.

If you want to improve this further, think about the links between his anger and his past. I get you meant the bullying made him angry, but really wouldn't he just feel more self-concious and depressed? Perhaps him having an outburst at this tom and realising that being angry helped him could aid his personality, as then this anger would be a learnt coping strategy.

[Crowzerplorodon]

Looks good to me.

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